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1.Manypeoplehadbeentouchedbythisfamoustragiclovestory.(不需要用过去完成时，用has就行了。touched也可以改用moved)2. AswellasTheButterflyLovers应和前句合并保持句意完整。3.it’saChineselegendofatragiclovestoryofapairoflovers,LiangandZhu.（有点冗余。改为legendoftwolovers'tragiclove较好。另外，你确定“梁祝”标题有the吗？）4.ZhudisguisedherselfasamanandattendschoolatHangzhou.（attend改为attended）5.Bothofthecouples（可直接用boththetwo couples)6.Attheend,theydiedineachother’sside.（diedsidebyside会否更好？或者diednexttoeachother）thetwo7. afterLiangdiscoveredZhuisactuallyawoman（wasactuallyawoman）8.Bothtwocouples(Both thetwocouples)9. theculturebackgroundinfluencedthecharacteristicsofthecharacters(太多the了，只要保留thecharacteristics其他都去掉并改复数。另外这句也可以改用被动语态。)10.ItisimpossibleforRomeoandJuliettobetogether,twosidesofthefamilieswillopposetheirmarriage.（两个单句中间缺乏连词，要加上Because在中间）11. Intoday’sworld（可改为intheworldtoday）12. peopleareallpursuitfreelove（people前面加and.而且，为了改正错误的时态和避免freelove的歧义，改为peoplehavethefreedomtopursuitloveastheylike）13.Therearestillmanypeoplehavingnocouragetogetoutwordsofloveandcauseloverscannotbetogether（there前面加however表示转折。therebe句型不可接复杂成分所以把havingnocourage改为withoutenoughcourage。andcause需作为另一分句，变为anditcausesthat）
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One day, Jack invites(修改为invited) some friends to his home for a(删除a) dinner.When none(修改为some) of his friends arrived, he asked them (增加to) sit at the table.He began to count for the people in his mind while they (增加were) having the delicious food.Suddenly, he cried out: "Oh, they(修改为there) are 13 people here!" Everybody's face turnedwhite except Mr Brown. He said slowly with the(删除the) smile on his face:"Don't be(删除be) worry, dear friends(修改为friend)! We have 14 people here. My wife will have a baby in a few weeks.She's in the family now." All of them became happy again. "Congratulations!" we(修改为They) said to Mr and Mrs Brown. They all had a wonderfully(修改为wonderful) time (增加at) that evening.你不是在考试吧
