订正英语作文

The manager of a business company gelt that his long way to success was veyy interesting.Twenty years ago,he employed several experianced sessters,one of whom had set up a world record .He chose a free and deserted car park as a garage.In that short time ,he was very worried about the thief who had sthong temption to sheal.So he went to the local station every month,anxious to catch the thief.

I want to live in Singapore. This is a beautiful country. The people who live there can speak Chinese or Japanese. If I live there, I think I will be happy because this is a peaceful city. There are many flowers and trees, so the air is very fresh.两个问题：there是副词，不能当介词宾语；or长用在选择疑问句中或否定句中，一般不用在肯定句中。

Such 表示例举时不能直接和名词连用，搭配是：such as 根据你的文意，应该等同与for example.monkey 后面你用了句号，但but没有大写，而且but snake is my best句型有歧义，需要交代清楚，不好意思啊，改不下去了，i ask my father that i want feed a snake 这句型......！建议你整篇都修改吧，我改就等于重新写给你了。英语作文不需要用复杂的句型和意思很大的单词，只要交代清楚事情，符合文法，语法正确就可以了，建议你不要用汉语的习惯来写英文作文？

1."live in there"改为"live there","there"是个副词,不需要"in"2."peace"改为"peaceful","peace"为名词,不能形容名词,"peaceful"为形容词,意思是和平的.

你的太中式英语了，如果需要帮你订正，请提供你的中文意思！以下是我的分析，仅供参考：1. The head of a business company felt that his long road to success was very interesting.订正：A head of a business company felt his long way to success pretty interesting. 这个地方不用the head，因为并未指定。用feel sth adj.的结构，可以让你的行文简单直接。the way to success是表示“通向成功之路”，介词to是固定用法。2. Twenty years ago,he employed several experianced helpers.One of them had set up a world record.订正：Twenty years ago,he employed several experianced assistants, one of which had had created a world record.helper指帮手（很多时候指做家务的帮手），用assistant较恰当。后后面一个非限制性定语从句简单描述其中的一个assisstant。3.He chose a free, deserted car park to be his garage.park就可以表示“停车场的意思”，不过你用的car park也可以，只是比较中式。这句非常OK。4. At that short time,he was very worride about the thief who had large temptation to steal.So he went to the local police station every month.the thief was hoped anxiously by him.订正：During that short time, he was worried that thieves with strong desire would conduct stealing, so he went to the local police station every month, anxiously expecting the thief could be arrested. “在。。。期间”用During...较好。thieves with strong desire would conduct stealing 在thieves(thief的复数)前不加the，表示未指定，因为并不清楚是哪一个小偷，万一还是很多个小偷呢？加上conduct stealing是为了让这句话完整，因为中文里即使不说完整也能明白，但英文应该更清楚。anxiously expecting the thief could be arrested 个人认为选用expect是很好的，表示期待，用expecting表示伴随状态，描述他的心理。arrested是被捕的意思了。这应该只是一个开头，可能有些个别词仍可以讨论。不过，你的作文总的来讲比较中式。英语作文的原则：用最简单的词和句表达尽量完整（恰当）的意思。

1.This is a beautiful country=>That/It is a beautiful country 你现在还不在那里吧，那就要用that,或者就用代词it2.The people who live in there=>People who live there 3.There are many flowers and trees 肯定句用and4.because it/that is a peaceful city it为代词,也可以用that，因为你现在还不在那里 5.a peaceful city 要用形容词peaceful

I want to live in Singapore as it is a beautiful country. The people there can speak English and either Chinese, Malay or Tamil. There are four main races in Singapore. They are Chinese, Malay, Indian and Eurasian. If I live there, i think I will be happy because this is a peaceful city with no racism. There are many flowers and trees, as a result the air is very fresh.The food in Singapore is also nice! There are a varieties of food in Singapore. Some of the delicious local dish include Chicken rice, Char Kuay Tiao, Laksa and Rojak. An example of Malay’s food is Lontong while Indian has their Roti Prata.Singapore is also a cosmopolitan hub. We can find people from the whole world. As Singapore is a cosmopolitan hub, we can too find Korean foods, Japanese foods etc.

i like animals very much . such as cats ,dogs and monkeys.but snakes are my favourite.so on sunday.i told my father that i wanted to feed a snake ,but he didn't agree with me . he thought snakes are dangerous animals,i told him that most of snakes were very safety.in the end ,he said:"if you get a good grade in the next monthly examination,I'll buy a snake for you" I was very surprise,but i felt stress,too.that day ,i told a friend about the thing,she felt very strange.because she thought most girls are afraid of snakes. anyway,I'll study hard ,because i want to get the snake. 同学，时态要注意啊。应该用一般过去时吧。还有，句首字母大写就不给你改了。。