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Should children be given pocket money?Recent years (句子缺少主语)have witnessed that increasing numbers of parents tend to give their children a handsome sum of allowance. In accordance with (in accordance with 不如 according to 恰当,前者太正式了)China Daily, the majority of surveyed people illustrated (illustrated 是更详细的描述,indicated会更好)that children should be given pocket money. Before presenting my view, I will explore both sides of (少了this。没有this 或者the, 读者无法知道你说的是哪一个问题)controversial issue.Some parents believe that their children can reap a lot of benefits (reap有收获的意思,不适用。可以直接用benefit) from being provided (少了with) pocket money. First of all, having some money can help children foster good habits of saving; if children are disciplined and budget the money accordingly, they will plan the method they want to spend through making a list. (从 “and budget”到句号句子意思不清晰,有重复。)Secondly, parents provide more freedom to their children by giving money, which may help cultivate independence and develop (少了a) sense of responsibility. Last but not the least, because of the pocket money (这里不是指特定的零用钱,所以不用the), children can set goals and struggle with (struggle多是指在困境中挣扎,不适用) those, having more allowance can decrease the number of obstacles in life.(意思表达地不对,这句话读上去像是零花钱能够帮孩子们摆平人生道路上的困难。。。)On the other hand, there (少了动词 are) still some people contending that children should not be given allowance (这里要么用单数,an allowance;要么用双数,allowances). Firstly, someone (someone 可以指任何人,可这里你谈论的是孩子,所以应该用children) who is focused (is focused 是被动语态,而且语气太肯定了。不是所有的孩子都专心学习的,所以应该用 “should focus”--他们应该专心致志)on school work may not (may not用在这里像是“孩子可能没有零花钱”,应用 should not-- “他们不应该有零花钱) have allowance, for the reason that incorrectly spending ways is simply taking away too much time from studying(句子繁琐反而难以理解,而且单复数混淆。“taking too much time from studying”直接省略为“distract from studying”。“incorrectly”是副词,这里应该用形容词。既然用了复数的“ways”,那后面的动词也该用复数的“are”) namely, it can cut into their studies.(这句的意思与上一句相似,没必要重复。举例更适用,因为你在写论文,在大致描述一个观点之后,要举例来巩固,以及让读者能够更清楚的明白你的意思) Secondly, children are not mature enough so that they are vulnerable to some social evils and may easily go astray. They can not distinguish right or wrong (distinguish...from...是个词组,把什么与什么分清), the money may be used in (应该用for)playing games, gambling or even drug-taking. Thirdly, it is easy to see (不是能够“简单看到”,而是“普遍”,应该用 it is common for) students comparing (to compare) their allowance in school with others, which may cause psychological problems.From above discussion, if I am asked to make a choice I would not hesitate to side with the former one. However, the parents should teach their children the money is hard-earned, and then set examples in order to give them moral guidance of how to spend money correctly词汇量固然重要,可是如果不清楚词语的意思及用法,不适当的用词只会适得其反。而且写论文最重要的是条理清晰,思路明确,句式复杂了反而难懂,让人不明白你真正想表达的意思。再者,还有些语法问题。不过lz已经不错了,而且又很努力,祝你考高分~

雅思培训英语作文题目

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父母为孩子包办一切范文:There are two paintings: the first picture, although the storm outside, the greenhouse is still in full bloom with flowers. But the second picture, we see the same flower, once moved to the outside, immediately withered in the wind and rain, and this also confirms the title of "greenhouse flowers can not withstand the wind and rain," the thesis, which is two pictures for meaning.小花骨朵、 说(08:34):Many parents doting on their children every possible way, I am afraid the children to eat a bit bitter, a little aggrieved by the parents do everything for the child, the child as a "hothouse flowers", the result they lack the ability to solve problems independently, know what to do when we encounter setbacks .In addition, the current education system, children learn from a heavy burden, most of the time spent in school and family, there is no chance for social interaction, so how can it grow? In short, we need to promptly and effectively address the child to education. Only experienced difficulties by people in order to hone a strong personality, is the only way they can eventually become a strong community.

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【题目翻译】在一些地方,外国游客参观文化和历史景点的时候被收取比当地游客更多的费用。你同意还是不同意? 【关键词分析】foreign visitors, be chargedmore注意这道题目是新题,与老题不同,问的不是外国游客旅游给当地带来的好处和坏处,而是是否应该收取更多的费用。尽管写法大同小异,但是还是要把“收费”这个关键词体现出来的。 【话题分类与题型】本题是新题,属于文化旅游类话题,题型为议论文(Argumentation/Discursive)。最近一次考旅游文化类话题是2011年2月12日。 【话题评价】最近一直在考原封不动的老题,这次终于考了一回新题了。但是和之前的所谓新题一样,依然是换汤不换药,考生仍然在老题中得到一些借鉴:比如下列1号题目国际旅游业会让游客与当地人产生冲突,3、4号题目中国际旅游业带来的坏处。特别是2号话题,与本题极为接近,旅游业是否应该成为盈利性行业,与是否应该向国外游客征收高额费用,是非常相似的。 【类似真题】1. International tourism is now the biggest industryin the world. Unfortunately, it brings tension rather thanunderstanding between people from different cultures. To whatextent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? (031011, 031018,040403)2. Some people think that cultural traditions may bedestroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Othersbelieve it is the only way to save thesetraditions. Discuss on both sides and give youropinion. (050319)3. International tourism has become a huge industryin the world. Do the problems of international travel outweigh its advantages?(060520)4. Tourism is an excellent way to develop a country,but it can also cause harm. How can countries ensure that tourism benefits thedevelopment? (110212) 【结构与思路】本文适合写成双边支持型,把支持的理由和反对的理由各摆一下,最终得出结论,并且给出简单的解决方法。 I. Introduction1. 文章背景:国际旅游业的市场出现了前所未有的繁荣。但是,与此伴随的是游客数量的迅速增加。The market of international tourism is flourishingas never before. However, this booming is accompanied by thesoaring number of tourists, which may bring damage to the touristattractions as well as the local environment.2. 引出主题:因此,有些人提出国外的游客应该被收取更多的费用。Therefore, some people raise the idea that foreignvisitors should pay more than local people when they arevisiting.3.我的观点:尽管这种做法会给当地带来一定的收入,但是从长期来看也会给当地的旅游业带来负面影响。Despite the income that it may bring to thetourist attractions, this practice will exert a negative influenceon local tourism in the long run. II. Body 1:支持的理由1. 必要性:旅游景点的维护需要大量的资金,而很大一部分资金都来自于当地的政府税收。The maintenance of scenic spots requires largeamount of capital a large proportion of which comes from therevenue of the local government. 外国游客并不像当地游客一样给旅游地直接带来税收,因此向他们收取更高的门票费用是合理的。Unlike local visitors, foreign tourists do notcontribute directly to the local taxation, so it is reasonable tocharge them higher entrance fee.2. 好处1:这部分资金可以用来维护旅游景点,包括古建筑物的修缮renovation of historicalbuildings,污染的清理,和文物的保护the preservation of cultural relics.3. 好处2:由于收取了更高的费用,势必带来游客数量的减少,从而减少游客对旅游景点的破坏,和环境的污染 III. Body 2:反对的理由1. 国外游客会觉得受到了不公正的待遇unfair service,遭受了歧视discrimination,因此可能会与当地游客发生冲突conflict。2. 从长期来看,这种做法会带来外国游客的减少,这对于当地的旅游业健康发展是不利的。In the long run, this practice may lead to thedecrease in the number of international tourists, which may do harmto the healthy development of local tourism. IV. Conclusion:1. 重申观点:尽管向外国游客收取更高的费用会给旅游地带来的一定的好处,但是它会给当地的形象和旅游业的长期发展带来负面影响。2. 解决方法:因此我认为最佳的解决方案不是向外国游客收取更多的钱,而是通过加大投资,对旅游景点和当地环境进行更好的保护,从而吸引更多的游客。Therefore, I think the best solution is not tocharge foreign visitors more money, but to invest more capital onthe protection of scenic spots and the localenvironment.

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