中国式英语文章

Success is not because of luck ,but hard working.When you succeed, others will congratulate to you. They always think that you are in luck and the God bless you. Then I want to tell you that the success is not because of luck, but hard work. Here is an example to show you the details.There are two new employees in a company. One graduated from a famous university, and the other one was from a normal university. Many people said the latter was in luck. But he just laugh it off. He made the final victory in an internal selection of competent competition.On the podium , a lot of people said that he was really very lucky, as his leader was the judge.Who knows that how much effort he made, how many time he worked for and how much data he analysed?It is said that the opportunity is often to those who are prepared, and the good luck often likes to the hard-working people. The hard working can get more knowledge, so when the opportunity comes, you can catch it and make success.稍微改了下，求采纳~最重要是不重复，不啰嗦，能一句话解决的，坚决不用两句。。

有本书叫《中式英语之鉴》，你可以看看哦，肯定会有帮助的。

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Success is not because of luck ,but hard workWhen you succeed, others will say congratulations to you. They often say that you are luck and the God bless you. Then I want to tell you that the success is not because of luck, but hard work. Then I will give you an example to explain thatThe company hired two new employees. One is graduated from a famous university, and the other one is ordinary university.When the ordinary university staff to work in our company，many people said he was in luck. But he just laugh it off.Later, in an internal selection of competent competition, he was final, and the one who was graduated from a famous university was final too. And he made the final victory. In the promotion of the reception, a lot of people said that his luck was very good, because of that his leader was the judge.But, I want to say that his success is not by luck, but by hard work. In fact, no one knows that how much effort he made, how many nights he was without sleep and how much date he analysed.As the saying goes, the opportunity is often to those who are prepared, and the good luck often likes to the hard-working people. The hard working can get more knowledge, so， when the opportunity comes, you can catch it and make success.Later, in an internal selection of competent competition, he was final, and the one who was graduated from a famous university was final too. And he made the final victory.这句话不明白你想要表达什么意思，翻译不衔接用了很多not....but.. 一直在重复这句话Success is not because of luck ,but hard work。可以换一种说法，比如：On the road leading to the success of the most important is to rely on the efforts。整篇文章显得用词比较牵强，比较拗口。

Success is not because of luck ,but hard work。这句话不要逗号，not...but....本来就是在一句话中用的。you are in luck，直接就可以用you are lucky.没有见过in  luck这种用法。God bless you应该是God blesses you吧why I say，应该是why I say that， that 代替你上面所说的。The company hire 改成The company hiresnormal university.这里你想说的是很普通的大学吧，那就我建议你改成common university When he（the who he  （the one）came from the normal university came to the company to work at（for） the first time第一次。Later, in an internal selection of competent competition, he was final, and the one who was graduated from a famous university was final too. 这句话表达的什么意思？、his luck was very good你是想说她运气很好吗?这是典型的中国式英语，英语中一般会说he  is a lucky boy(他是个幸运儿）来表达某人运气很好。because of that his leader was the judge.这句话中because of后面不能加句子应该去掉of,,还有这句话是什么意思？his success is not by luck, but by hard work.跟第一句一样的错误