linlin0530
粗略的从后面看到前面，发现了这些，你觉得好的话你不妨采纳M. very glad换成 ready，不要让人误以为你频繁出差别有用心。L pleasurable 建议换成 easygonging，不换也无关紧要。J.K,有语法问题。你要通篇省略I am，随时记得后面的动词要么是动词不定式或者动名词。K中你忘了冠词。修改为working wll under pressure. possess a strong sense of responsibility.I,highly efficient换成high-efficiency。自认为合成词比形容词前加副词更酷。H,整句话换成 able to master necessary knowledge soon你不觉得你这句话漏洞百出？如果说不好，还不如说的短一些。G 要自吹，就把familiar with 变成good at ，F。加atD参照Ewith capable变成capable ofB最前面7-year exprience ofA.最后面with a great sense of接着改为SKILLS OF WORK还有一个JOB TITLE，SALES变成 SALESMAN觉得更好。前面的问题比较少，但还是有的。第一段：最后面的MINORS是什么啊，elective才是选修课 ,.第三段：最后一句officials变成colleagues.
燕园小西
第二句说：Then I would like to make a Brief self-Introduction . 会感觉好些月份前面的介词是 in March而且你一直重复使用then I will 这样的用法，太多了会有审美疲劳
中国神运
有一些拼写上的错误， First, thank you for giving me the opportunity to take part in this interview. Now, I will introduce myself briefly. I will graduate from Tianjin Foreign Language University and get my master deree in March this year. I think I am qualified for this position, because of following points: First, as I can speak both orean and English fluently, I can deal with customers who can speak English or Korean. I can get the information from them and provide best service to them.
