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Something I plan to do during the winter holiday. I want to read a book during the winter holiday because reading are very important to us. I usually do some readings in my spare time. For example, when I am free, I will read newspapers. I often read books before I go to bed, which has turned out to be right because they can improve my reading and writing ability.

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I want to read a book during the winter holiday because books are very important to us. I usually read 【改成enjoy】a book in my spare time. For example【可以改为for instance,同样的意思,明显这个词汇更高级】, when I have nothing to do, I will read【改为appreciate,有欣赏的意思】 it.{ I also read a book before I go to bed, which has turned out to be right because they can improve my reading and writing ability.}这整句话前面那句是在不咋的,和你后面所用的词汇完全不是一个档次的,话说你几年级,后面的词汇到高中(turn out to be adj.)才会教。所以我决定全部改掉。。As a result of it,I broaden my horizon.What's more,I gain various knowledge.At the same time,I improve my reading ability in a short time.

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小顽童阿淑

想要体高英语作文写作水平在原有的基础上进行修改提升是非常有效的办法,下面我就跟你们分享下怎么修改英语作文   一、英语作文的等级   四档文:内容不完整,语言表述错误很多,不能完整地表达思想。可得0-2分   三档文:内容完整,重点描述合理,但表述不充分,层次结构不合理,语言不够流畅,字迹不够工整,5-6  处语法或拼写错误;字数不足。可得3-5分   二档文:内容完整,重点描述比较充分,层次结构比较清晰,语言比较流畅,字迹工整,有3-4处语法或拼写错误;字数符合要求。可得6-8分   一档文:内容完整,重点描述清楚、合理,表达充分,层次结构清晰,字迹工整,可读性强,语言流畅,仅有1-2处语法或拼写错误;字数符合要求。可得9-10分 二、英语作文修改案例   案例一:   A Trip to the Zoo   原稿:   Yesterday way Sunday and it was a fine day.So I take a trip to the zoo. I went there by bus, I get there at 8:00 am.There are many people.and some people watched the tigers ,some watched the monkeys, Others watched the bids,I saw many animals and I tool many phtos. That’s a interesting trip. I’ll never forget it. That’s  my trip.   修改后:   It was a sunny Sunday  After a quick breakfast , I couldn’t wait to get on the bus. This is my first time to enjoy a trip alone. Varions lovebal animals are waiting in the zoo!   As soon as I got there,  I was attracted at once.  Monkeys were climbing in the tree happily. Sometimes they even came to fetch the bananas in visitors’hands. How naughty they were! What’s more, I was also intersted in the tigers. They are called “the king of animals”,but at this moment they were lying quetly ,maybe they were sleepy. Animals ,humanbeings ,we live in a world .we are family . I t came to my mind immiediatly.   Anyway, I had an interesting trip today . It gave me a deep impression, I’ll never forget it.   案例二:   My favourite season   原稿:   There are four seasons in a year. And my favourite season is summer. Although it’s very hot. I still love it .Because I can swim in the sea .And lie in sun . That’s very comfortable.And I also can eat some Icecreams.they are delicious so there’re lots of thingd to do in summer. That’s  very intersting. So I love summer. That’s my favourite season.   修改后   My favourite season   As is all know , there are four seasons. Speaking of my favourite , summer comes first although it is hot.   Many things can be done in summer such as swimming in the sea, Lying on the beach  … How comfortable ! More importantly  I can eat delicious Icecream . Of course, we also enjoy beautiful views outside. And I’m always looking forward to going fishing with my father .   In a word ,summer is my favourite season because it brings me a lot of happiness .   三、英语作文修改的注意事项   1、整篇文章逻辑的修改.作文的目的是为了表达东西,所以首先要确保作文表达的内容是清楚并且符合逻辑的,如果段落之间都是矛盾的就说不过去了.   2、语法的修改篇章与段落的修改过后看句子的结构,说仔细了就是语法的修改.   3、还有就是单词拼写等小细节的修改了.

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